Tide Volume 1

[Evil Amoeba]

So, I was wondering what you guys thought of Tide Volume 1. What parts did you like? What parts didn't you like? Do you think it deserves to continue as a series? Heck, you can even get down to who your favorite character is. (Though, really, I don't think it's far enough for that...)

Also, note that this is an unrevised version of the story. If you see grammar errors or ineffective sentences, point them out.

EDIT: You know, you can reply with a message, too. <_<;

[Vo Sabre]

Great story, Amoeba. You had me hooked from the first few paragraphs and I couldn't take my eyes off it! Definitely need to continue the story.

Ok, things I liked: the whole concept is pretty cool, VRMMORPG (wish they had those now); you did a good job describing the setting and characters although you could've went into just a little more detail; nice way to end the volume although a cliffhanger would've been much more interesting

Few things I disliked: like I said before, you might need just a little more details on the setting and characters; I was a little shocked at the pink hair part (mainly because of recent inside jokes between me and David Anderson) but I guess that is just part of her personality

Excellent job, I'm looking forward to reading the sequel!

[Evil Amoeba]

Wow. That was just the kind of comment I like. Other users, follow Vo's example! Point out flaws in my story!

Also, I'm going to address the pink hair thing in the next volume. It's not naturally pink, don't worry. _{By the way, injokes?}